An absolutely fantastic job! Amazing job, hun! The story was fantastic, the women were beautiful (and mindless)! The visuals were great! And your English was pretty good too!

I loved all your little details as well, from the "slave outfit" to the statues to the "slave" tattoo on her butt. I loved the rolled back eyes, the sinister villain, and the obedient dialogue of the new slave girl. Very nicely done!
Excellent first chapter and I hope to see more!

I wholeheartedly agree. As a fellow fan of EMC, the story hits all the right beats, being both very well done and very sexy. It's a fantastic first chapter and I know I'm very pleased you decided to contribute it. I very much enjoyed it and seriously hope you'll do more soon.

Excellent pacing and presentation as well. Great job overall.

Great, job, Hypnoman. Your work is excellent!

Hypnoman,

Congratulations on a great first chapter. I've enjoyed your pictures since you started posting them on this site, and I like how you have drawn ideas from those pictures into a more formal story. Kudos sir.

-Dixon

I really, really like your villian, Hypnosia.
At first, upon looking at your sketches, I thought she was going to be like a typical tryant villian that just overpowered her victims and created an army of mindless slave woman. But, in a few other sketches, you had her, herself, being hypnotized and serving as a slave. This made me hope for other possibilities.

The best possibility, imo, is exactly how you laid out your opening story. I love where you started the series at with an unsuspecting hero/victim entering into an unknown trap set by an unknown villian. By her first words to Hypnosia, Kiara never fathomed that there would be any danger in where she entering into and was completely unprepared. The element of surprise not only applied to the trap being sprung but, also on the fact that the victim had no idea what to do after it had been. She was completely oblivious until the villian revealed piece by piece what was going to happen. The victim's ignorance made her situation worse as she had no idea that the real reason she was there was to open the box. When she found that out, she again had no idea that she would so easily lose her will to Hypnosia's mental power.

Hypnosia, before and now, holds all the cards and Kiara didn't, nor will her friends, know they were even playing in a card game.

I can't wait to see how you work Hypnosia further into the story.

Bravo on an awesome start to your series.

Thanks for the story! Your women are stunning, the story was great! It was an incredibly pleasant surprise. Please keep up the great work!